No joke, I wrote 300 pages, sent it to a beta read and they hated it.
Me after getting their reply:
The next day, I deleted all 300 pages and decided to write Unintentional Addiction. By the time I got back to this story, I had a better outlook on my hero, who had an arrogant, cruel and restrictive personality until I made him a little more manageable.
I started slow, writing the first twelve chapters and then sending 2 to 3 chapters to one beta reader, who in turn would read it and then text back: Done.
After that I would send questions via text like: at the end did you hate Yon?
She would have to respond on our Marco Polo ap because it lets her get all her thoughts out without me interrupting.
It was great. It also let me go back and fix any scenes that needed fleshed out because I have a horrible habit to write fast.
After finishing I sent the 2nd draft to another beta. This was me after reading what they thought of the new version.
Unexpected Commander is the third book of the series but this one is darker than the first two because Yon and Yelena have been abused. Yon in his youth and Yelena after she was kidnapped and experimented on by an apathetic Numan.
In my final version I’m happy to say that I love how Yon had to work on his abrupt and harsh words, just as Yelena had to find her voice.
These two are perfect for each other and I loved how protective Yon was of her the entire book.
Here is a sneak peek into one of those protective scenes:
“Are you always like this?”
Yon placed her on the bed, took a pillow, and handed it to her. “Keep the foot elevated. And, no, I’m not always like this.”
She held up her hand, hoping he wouldn’t leave her yet. She wanted to understand him better. “And when you say, ‘not always like this,’ do you mean you don’t knock people unconscious a lot?”
His head tilted slightly. “No, I meant I don’t usually come down to the planets I hate just to find a specific female and bring her back safely.”
It took a half-second longer than it should have for her to process that. “You came for me?”
“You shouldn’t have been down here in the first place.”
Yelena didn’t know what to say to that.
“Good thing you didn’t like Lotus Adaamas, because it was the last time you’re going to see it.” Yon was still holding out the pillow. His tone didn’t sound angry, more matter-of-fact.
She took the pillow and said, “Is it because of my skin? Or because of something else?”
“All of that and more.”
“What else could there be?”
“I will write you a list.”
If you haven’t read book 1 and 2, that’s okay, this book is still good on its own. But if you have read the others, it will enhance your reading experience.